- Limit party footage at beginning - avoid it looking too much like a scene. Footage is good but needs intercutting
- Introduce the 'legend' of the clown. Give background - perhaps flashback scene of children's party
- Hand picking up mask to put on? Perspective shot of clown?
- Shots of clown spotted by characters in discordant places (party scene lessens impact). Think 'It'
- More anchorage needed to set up the story
- Festival title is blurry
- Production title?
Monday, 4 February 2013
Feedback #1
This is the feedback that we have got from our teachers:
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